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Just thought I'd go along with this and get this out of the way for Ben Mare, for :iconjussonic:'s sake.

Character: Earth pony with Alicorn abilities

1. [ ] They are possessed by an angel. 
2. [ ] They are possessed by a demon.
3. [ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie.
4. [ ] They are physically strong. 
5. [ ] They have a rare hair/fur color.
6. [ ] Their eyes are an unusual color. 
7. [x] This eye color happens to be red. (Ben Mare always has red eyes.)
8. [ ] Their eyes change color.
9. [ ] They have wings.
10.[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift.
11.[ ] They are immortal.
12.[ ] [If female.] They have large boobs.
13.[ ] [If male.] They are very muscular.
14.[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender. 
15.[ ] They are pyrokinetic/etc. 
16.[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc.
17.[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers.
18.[x] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet. (In the redone MLP fanfic universe by me, JusSonic and some others, he has the Triforce Mark and he needs to earning the remaining pieces to form his Triforce Mark.)
19.[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers. 
20.[ ] They are a healer. 
21.[x] They are from a very rich/royal family.
22.[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background.
23.[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents.
24.[ ] They ran away from home.
25.[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
26.[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death. 
27.[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature.
29.[x] They were abused/spoiled as a child. (Back in school where ponies picked on him for his name, and Boris would not want him with Twilight Sparkle, his so-called beloved.)
30.[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender.
31.[x] They have lots of friends/no friends. (He used to have no friends, until he met Twilight Sparkle and Shining Armor, and they, Flash Sentry and Sunburst are his childhood friends. Plus, after he became known to Ponyville and Canterlot, he got a bunch of good friends.)
32.[ ] They are emo.
33.[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
35.[x] They have lots of morals and declare them a fair bit. (You could say he's the voice of reason for certain situations when any of the Mane 6 does something a little questionable or not right.
36.[ ] They have a mental disorder. 
37.[ ] They have an emotional disorder. 
38.[ ] They struggle to stay sane. 
39.[ ] They are a psycho. 
40.[ ] They have multiple personalities. 
41.[ ] They are very intelligent.
42.[ ] They have hallucinations.
43.[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc. 
44.[x] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet. (He adopted a pet wolf cub named Koga from Fluttershy.)
45.[ ] They have a guardian spirit.
46.[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul.
47.[ ] Their soul is not the same as them.
48.[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts. 
49.[ ] Some part of their body glows.
50.[ ] They have a rare/unusual name. (His last name, Mare, is short for "Maregilligan".)
51.[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, etc.
52.[ ] They have a twin/sibling(s) that they were separated from at birth/a young age.
53.[ ] They are connected with a certain element.
54.[ ] They are connected with a certain animal. 
55.[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'.
56.[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga.
65.[ ] They are very mysterious/dark.
66.[ ] They are very lively/happy.
67.[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly.
68.[ ] They are very patient. 
69.[ ] They are from a long line of assassins.
70.[x] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear. (He always wore a red collar, which makes him look distinguishable.)
71.[ ] They have amnesia. 
72.[ ] The have some sort of harmful curse upon them. 
73.[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy. 
74.[x] They are 'the chosen one'. (He doesn't know he's chosen for the Triforce Mark, but one day, he will learn it and be told about it.)
75.[ ] They have insomnia.
Take points off your OC's overall score if they fit any of the following statements- 

14 points

1. [ ] They smoke. 
2. [ ] They are an alcoholic. 
3. [ ] They are overweight. 
4. [ ] They are addicted to drugs. 
5. [ ] They have a short temper.
6. [ ] They enjoy bullying others. 
7. [ ] They do not care much about others. 
8. [ ] They are relatively emotionless.
9. [ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition.

0 point

Total: 14 points

Your point score:
5: Anti-Sue. Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they score that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit. 

6-15: Balanced Character. If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though. 

16-25: Borderline Mary-Sue. We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.

26: Mary-Sue. Please revise your character... NOW.

Ben Mare a Mary Sue/Gary Stu? I don't think so!
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